Melodies You'd Change (1,520 views)

[Baronessa]

Post melodies you'd like to re-imagine; not necessarily trying to reinvent a bad song from scratch, but rather songs you might even enjoy a lot but are frustrated with from time to time because of one tiny detail you'd do differently.

For example,



I think this song is amazing on its own, but if I focus too much on how the verse should resolve in G♯3 I won't enjoy it as much. It would make so much more sense progression-wise for the melody to first resolve in G♯3 and then C4.

Go ahead, I'm sure the artists in question will definitely read this and appreciate your feedback. :playball:

['S]

Although this song going to the parallel key for the 'chorusy' bit (e.g. @1:20) does set it apart from her other hits, maybe I'd prefer this if it was less prominent or was just a switch up of the chords in the original key... it's my bias for sad sounding stuff I guess:

[Baronessa]

Man, why does this melody not resolve into F♯3...

[Macca]

to be honest the last word in the chorus of 5/4 really should go up to c instead of going to g

[Henny Macc]

I feel that way about a few of handful of Viza vocal parts, because K'noup Tomopoulos plays it just a biiiit too safe for my taste in terms of higher singing sometimes.


I like how for this final chorus, he takes the chorus up to F4 and gives it a bit more of a sonorous energy. However, I wish he had then alternated the melody more by ascending up to A♭4 on the next line, like "search(F4)-ing (F4) the (F4) world (F4) for (E♭4) the (F4) girl (G4), that (G4) does(G4)-n't (F4) ex(G4)-i(G4)-iiiist (A♭4)". Could've made for a nice sustained G4 on the end note that way too, if he had repeated half of that same melody on the last "searching the world for the girl..."

Similar case for this part - I dislike how it starts at E4 and then mostly just sits there without much movement and never gets any higher, on what really feels like it should be an ascending melody. If I had it my way, the melody would've been "ask (E4) me (D♯4) now (E4), how (E4) we (E4) man(E4)-aged(E4) to (E4) stay (F♯4) so (E4) young (D♯4); ask (E4) me (F♯4) now (G4), how (G4) we (G4) man(G4)-aged (G4) to (G4) stay (A4) so (G4) dumb (F♯4)".

There's then a reprise of that part at 3:53, which I think should've just been a repeat of the melody at 2:17 an octave higher - that is to say: "ask (E4) me (F♯4) now (G4), how (G4) we (G4) man(G4)-aged (G4) to (G4) stay (A4) so (G4) young (F♯4); ask (F♯4) me (G4) now (A4), how (A4) we (A4) man(A4)-aged (A4) to (A4) stay (B4) so (G4) dumb (F♯4)".

For this one, I genuinely feel like the original idea of this chorus must've been to have the final line be an octave higher repeat of the previous line - "you're (A♯3) full (D♯4) of (F♯4) pin(G♯4)-ches (F♯4)". I kinda hate the semi-talked line around F4 that he does for it instead, and my only guess as to why they settled for that must've been because they couldn't get a good enough take of him singing up to G♯4 cleanly or something, cause that seems like the much more obvious and ideal melodic choice otherwise.

That section then repeats again at 1:45, and then there's a more climactic final chorus at 2:54 that he semi-sings around F♯4 that also sounds pretty vocally lame. I would've opted to rewrite that entire section and have it be "I (A♯3) used (D♯4) to (F♯4) love (G♯4) you (F♯4), but (D♯4) now (D♯4) I (F♯4) loathe (G♯4) you (A♯4); I'm (A♯3) off (D♯4) the (F♯4) hin(G♯4)-ges (F♯4), you're (A♯4) full (A♯4) of (A♯4) pin(A♯4)-ches(A♯4)!". And then for the closing lines at 3:21, have it be alternating melodies of A♯3-D♯4-F♯4-G♯4-F♯4 and D♯4-D♯4-F♯4-G♯4-A♯4 on those last few "you're full of pinches!" lines, with the very last one being sung entirely on A♯4.

As you can see, I am...opinionated about this kind of stuff.

[Captain Planet]

The whole of 3:00-3:02 sounds like mis-hit or out of tune guitar chords.

Probably the only time I have ever heard a misplayed note in a professional studio recording. Why the band chose to leave that in is baffling...

[Henny Macc]

Dec 26, 2021 2:58:35 GMT Captain Planet said:

Probably the only time I have ever heard a misplayed note in a professional studio recording.

You say that like every Kerry King guitar solo doesn't exist

[clem]

Dec 26, 2021 3:20:13 GMT Henny Macc said:

Dec 26, 2021 2:58:35 GMT Captain Planet said:

Probably the only time I have ever heard a misplayed note in a professional studio recording.

You say that like every Kerry King guitar solo doesn't exist

Can't be misplayed if the choice of notes was entirely random from the beginning 
I don't mind the crappiness of Kerry's guitar solos though. They somehow add to the wildness of Slayer songs, even if they sound like they were written by someone who didn't play guitar.